Elemental (haiku in 4) | poetry

[MsJacquiiC]

A poem… Can anyone see the bold insinuation of me welcoming my authentic self to the world in this piece?
Feel free to let me know what you think! So without further adieu:


Elemental (haiku in 4)

[Wind]
blow southward ol’ boy
blow now to the molten earth
blow swiftly: peace now.

[Earth]
lie downward ol’ boy
lie now; take your place in hell
lie: tombstone awaits.

[Fire]
burn westward ol’ boy
burn now you ashen heirloom
burn phoenix: begone.

[Water]
drip eastward ol’ boy
drip now molten tombstone heir
drip: your future awaits.



Copyright © Jacquii Cooke 2018

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This piece actually has multiple layers of meaning though. Sincerely. It can be read/interpreted in a myriad of ways, and depending on how you do perceive it - it could be read as me offering nothing but an eloquent dismissal to a hater (Boy BYE!!! type of situation) ... OR it could be interpreted as I originally asked: as an obituary of sorts to my "boy" self, as seen by the words which appear on each line after the colon:

Peace now.
Tombstone awaits.
Begone.
Your future awaits.

I'm completely inspired by the awe of nature. Its power - its force - its beauty - its turmoils, etc... So this piece can also be read as a rather dark homage to Mother Nature in all her glory speaking to parts of her self... And I digress LOL. I wonder how you all read it and can you see the different facets of this very spontaneous write?​

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J.​

 

[Emily Moon]

Cool take on writing haiku. I admire the way you begin each tercet with the same word. Like waves lapping a shore. I definitely see you releasing your former self. And that release creates the space to welcome your new self. Well done!